Clarify by reordering some sentences; improve English idiom.

Corrected capitilization of some titls. Reworked some clumsy
sentences. Eliminated one tautological sentence.

1 files changed, 21 insertions, 21 deletions

diff --git a/chapter09/network.xml b/chapter09/network.xml
index 5ea7e3add..e2d0a5edf 100644
--- a/chapter09/network.xml
+++ b/chapter09/network.xml
@@ -17,15 +17,15 @@
   <sect2>
     <title>Creating Network Interface Configuration Files</title>
 
-    <para>Which interfaces are brought up and down by the network script
-    usually depends on the files in <filename
-    class="directory">/etc/sysconfig/</filename>.  This directory should
+    <para>The files in <filename class="directory">/etc/sysconfig/</filename>
+    usually determine which interfaces are brought up and down by the network
+    script.  This directory should
     contain a file for each interface to be configured, such as
-    <filename>ifconfig.xyz</filename>, where <quote>xyz</quote> should describe
+    <filename>ifconfig.xyz</filename>, where <quote>xyz</quote> describes
     the network card.  The interface name (e.g. eth0) is usually appropriate.
-    Inside this file are attributes to this interface, such as its IP
-    address(es), subnet masks, and so forth.  It is necessary that the stem of
-    the filename be <emphasis>ifconfig</emphasis>.</para>
+    Each file contains the attributes of one interface, such as its IP
+    address(es), subnet masks, and so forth.  The stem of
+    the filename must be <emphasis>ifconfig</emphasis>.</para>
 
     <note>
       <para>If the procedure in the previous section was not used, udev
@@ -38,10 +38,10 @@
       <para>The interface names depend on the implementation and
       configuration of the udev daemon running on the system.  The udev
       daemon for LFS (installed in <xref linkend="ch-system-eudev"/>) will
-      not run until the LFS system is booted.  So it's unreliable to
-      determine the interface names being used in LFS system by running
+      not run until the LFS system is booted.  So the interface names 
+      in the LFS system cannot always be determined by running
       those commands on the host distro,
-      <emphasis>even though in the chroot environment</emphasis>.</para>
+      <emphasis>even in the chroot environment</emphasis>.</para>
     </note>
 
     <para>The following command creates a sample file for the
@@ -59,14 +59,14 @@ PREFIX=<replaceable>24</replaceable>
 BROADCAST=<replaceable>192.168.1.255</replaceable></literal>
 EOF</userinput></screen>
 
-    <para>The values in italics must be changed in every file to match
-    the proper setup.</para>
+    <para>The values in italics must be changed in each file, to set
+    the interfaces up correctly.</para>
 
     <para>If the <envar>ONBOOT</envar> variable is set to <quote>yes</quote> the
     System V network script will bring up the Network Interface Card (NIC) during
-    the system boot process. If set to anything but <quote>yes</quote> the NIC
-    will be ignored by the network script and not be automatically brought up.
-    The interface can be manually started or stopped with the
+    the system boot process. If set to anything besides <quote>yes</quote>, the NIC
+    will be ignored by the network script and will not be started automatically.
+    Interfaces can be manually started or stopped with the
     <command>ifup</command> and <command>ifdown</command> commands.</para>
 
     <para>The <envar>IFACE</envar> variable defines the interface name,
@@ -84,11 +84,11 @@ EOF</userinput></screen>
     gateway IP address, if one is present. If not, then comment out the
     variable entirely.</para>
 
-    <para>The <envar>PREFIX</envar> variable contains the number of
-    bits used in the subnet. Each octet in an IP address is 8 bits. If the
-    subnet's netmask is 255.255.255.0, then it is using the first three octets
+    <para>The <envar>PREFIX</envar> variable specifies the number of
+    bits used in the subnet. Each segment of an IP address is 8 bits. If the
+    subnet's netmask is 255.255.255.0, then it is using the first three segments
     (24 bits) to specify the network number. If the netmask is 255.255.255.240,
-    it would be using the first 28 bits.  Prefixes longer than 24 bits are
+    the subnet is using the first 28 bits.  Prefixes longer than 24 bits are
     commonly used by DSL and cable-based Internet Service Providers (ISPs).
     In this example (PREFIX=24), the netmask is 255.255.255.0. Adjust the
     <envar>PREFIX</envar> variable according to your specific subnet.
@@ -139,7 +139,7 @@ EOF</userinput></screen>
   </sect2>
 
   <sect2 id="ch-config-hostname">
-    <title>Configuring the system hostname</title>
+    <title>Configuring the System Hostname</title>
 
     <indexterm zone="ch-config-hostname">
       <primary sortas="d-hostname">hostname</primary>
@@ -156,7 +156,7 @@ EOF</userinput></screen>
 
      <para><replaceable>&lt;lfs&gt;</replaceable> needs to be replaced with the
      name given to the computer. Do not enter the Fully Qualified Domain Name
-     (FQDN) here. That information is put in the
+     (FQDN) here. That information goes in the
      <filename>/etc/hosts</filename> file.</para>
 
   </sect2>