Grammatic changes to the preface.

git-svn-id: http://svn.linuxfromscratch.org/LFS/trunk/BOOK@2084 4aa44e1e-78dd-0310-a6d2-fbcd4c07a689

1 files changed, 12 insertions, 11 deletions

diff --git a/preface/whoread.xml b/preface/whoread.xml
index 6dca60333..9821eaf8a 100644
--- a/preface/whoread.xml
+++ b/preface/whoread.xml
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ is "Why go through all the hassle of manually building a Linux system
 from scratch when you can just download and install an existing one?". That
 is a good question.</para>
 
-<para>One important reason for LFS's existence is helping people 
+<para>One important reason for LFS' existence is to help people
 learn how a Linux system works from the inside out. Building an LFS system
 helps demonstrate what makes Linux tick, and how things work together and
 depend on each other. And perhaps most importantly, how to customize it to
@@ -21,9 +21,9 @@ directory layout and boot script setup. You also dictate where, why and how
 programs are installed.</para>
 
 <para>Another benefit of LFS is the ability to create a very compact Linux
-system. When installing a regular distribution, you end up with a lot of
-programs you likely will never use. They're just sitting there wasting
-(precious) disk space. It isn't difficult to build LFS systems of under
+system. When installing a regular distribution, you end up with several
+programs which you are likely to never use. They're just sitting there wasting
+(precious) disk space. It isn't difficult to build an LFS system less than
 100 MB. Does that still sound like a lot? A few of us have been working on
 creating a very small embedded LFS system. We successfully built a system
 that was just enough to run the Apache web server with approximately 8MB
@@ -33,24 +33,25 @@ less. Try that with a regular distribution.</para>
 <para>We could compare distributed Linux to a hamburger you buy at a
 fast-food restaurant, you have no idea what you are eating. LFS on the
 other hand, doesn't give you a hamburger, but the recipe to make a hamburger. 
-This allows you to review it, omit unwanted ingredients, and allows you to
-add your own ingredients that enhance the flavor of your burger. When you
+This allows you to review it, to omit unwanted ingredients, and to
+add your own ingredients which enhance the flavor of your burger. When you
 are satisfied with the recipe, you go on to preparing it. You make it just
 the way you like it: broil it, bake it, deep-fry it, barbeque it, or eat it
 tar-tar (raw).</para>
 
 <para>Another analogy that we can use is that of comparing LFS with a 
 finished house. LFS will give you the skeletal plan of a house, but it's up 
-to you to build it, giving you the freedom to adjust your plans as you go.</para>
+to you to build it. You have the freedom to adjust your plans as you
+go.</para>
 
 <para>Another advantage of a custom built Linux system is security.
 By compiling the entire system from source code, you are empowered to audit
 everything and apply all the security patches you feel are needed. You don't 
 have to wait for somebody else to compile binary packages that fix a security
-hole. Examine the new patch and build it yourself. You have no guarantee 
-that the new package was built correctly and actually fixes the problem
-(adequately). You never truly know whether a security hole is fixed or
-not unless you do it yourself.</para>
+hole. Unless you examine the patch and build it yourself you have no
+guarantee that the new package was built correctly and actually fixes the
+problem (adequately). You never truly know whether a security hole is fixed
+or not unless you do it yourself.</para>
 
 </sect1>