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diff --git a/preface/foreword.xml b/preface/foreword.xml
index 448bbbdf1..196e73d9a 100644
--- a/preface/foreword.xml
+++ b/preface/foreword.xml
@@ -2,15 +2,15 @@
 <title>Foreword</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="foreword.html" dir="preface"?>
 
-<para>Having used a number of different Linux distributions, I was never fully
-satisfied with any of them. I didn't like the way the arrangement of the
-bootscripts. I didn't like the way certain programs were configured by
-default. Much more of that sort of thing bothered me. Finally I realized that
-if I wanted full satisfisfaction from my Linux system I would have to build
-my own system from scratch, using only the source code. I resolved not to use 
-pre-compiled packages of any kind, nor CD-ROM or 
-bootdisk that would install some basic utilities. I would use my current 
-Linux system to develop my own.</para>
+<para>Having used a number of different Linux distributions, I was never
+fully satisfied with any of them. I didn't like the way the arrangement of
+the bootscripts. I didn't like the way certain programs were configured by
+default. Much more of that sort of thing bothered me. Finally I realized
+that if I wanted full satisfisfaction from my Linux system I would have to
+build my own system from scratch, using only the source code. I resolved
+not to use pre-compiled packages of any kind, nor CD-ROM or bootdisk that
+would install some basic utilities. I would use my current Linux system to
+develop my own.</para>
 
 <para>This wild idea seemed very difficult at the time and often seemed
 an impossible task. After sorting out all kinds of problems, such as
diff --git a/preface/organpart1.xml b/preface/organpart1.xml
index 255fc6cda..40c3641a4 100644
--- a/preface/organpart1.xml
+++ b/preface/organpart1.xml
@@ -1,10 +1,11 @@
 <sect2 id="pre-organ1">
 <title>Part I - Introduction</title>
 
-<para>Part One gives general information about this book (versions, where
-to get it, changelog, mailing lists, and how to get in touch with us).
-It also explains a few important aspects you really want and need to
-read before starting to build an LFS system.</para>
+<para>Part I gives general information about the contents of book
+(revisions, where to get it, changelog, mailing lists, and other contact
+information). It also contains suggested reading that discusses a few
+important considerations to think about before beginning your LFS
+system.</para>
 
 </sect2>
 
diff --git a/preface/organpart2.xml b/preface/organpart2.xml
index 2e647a314..de4e82870 100644
--- a/preface/organpart2.xml
+++ b/preface/organpart2.xml
@@ -1,10 +1,11 @@
 <sect2 id="pre-organ2">
-<title>Part II - Installation of the LFS system</title>
+<title>Part II - Installation of the base LFS system</title>
 
-<para>Part Two guides you through the installation of the LFS system which will 
-be the foundation for the rest of the system. Whatever you choose to do 
-with your brand new LFS system, it will be built on the foundation 
-that's installed in this part.</para>
+<para>Part II guides you through the building and installation of an LFS
+system. The finished LFS system will be the core foundation that the rest
+of your Linux system will be built on. What you choose to do with your brand
+new LFS system will be built and supported by this foundation that we build
+in Part II.</para>
 
 </sect2>
 
diff --git a/preface/organpart3.xml b/preface/organpart3.xml
index 73fdff926..4624a5837 100644
--- a/preface/organpart3.xml
+++ b/preface/organpart3.xml
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <sect2 id="pre-organ3">
 <title>Part III - Appendixes</title>
 
-<para>Part Three contains various Appendices.</para>
+<para>Part III contains various Appendices.</para>
 
 </sect2>
 
diff --git a/preface/whoread.xml b/preface/whoread.xml
index bda73541e..ea84fee77 100644
--- a/preface/whoread.xml
+++ b/preface/whoread.xml
@@ -3,13 +3,13 @@
 <?dbhtml filename="whoread.html" dir="preface"?>
 
 <para>There are many reasons why somebody would want to read this book. The
-principle reason being to install a LFS system. A question many people raise 
+principle reason being to install an LFS system. A question many people raise 
 is "Why go through all the hassle of manually building a Linux system 
-from scratch when you can just download and install an  existing one?". That
+from scratch when you can just download and install an existing one?". That
 is a good question.</para>
 
 <para>One important reason for LFS's existence is helping people 
-learn how a Linux system works from the inside out. Building a LFS system
+learn how a Linux system works from the inside out. Building an LFS system
 helps demonstrate what makes Linux tick, and how things work together and
 depend on each other. And perhaps most importantly, how to customize it to
 your own tastes and needs.</para>
@@ -32,23 +32,22 @@ less. Try that with a regular distribution.</para>
 
 <para>We could compare distributed Linux to a hamburger you buy at a
 fast-food restaurant. You have no idea what you are easting. LFS on the
-other hand, doesn't give you a hamburger, but the recipe to make a hamburger.
-This allows you to inspect it, omit unwanted ingredients, and allows you to
-add your own ingredients that enhance the flavour of your burger. When you
+other hand, doesn't give you a hamburger, but the recipe to make a hamburger. 
+This allows you to review it, omit unwanted ingredients, and allows you to
+add your own ingredients that enhance the flavor of your burger. When you
 are satisfied with the recipe, you go on to preparing it. You make it just
 the way you like it: broil it, bake it, deep-fry it, barbeque it, or eat it
-raw.</para>
+tar-tar (raw).</para>
 
 <para>Another analogy that we can use is that of comparing LFS with a 
-finished house. LFS will give you the skeleton of a house, but it's up 
-to you to install plumbing, electrical outlets, kitchen, bathtub, 
-wallpaper, etc.</para>
+finished house. LFS will give you the skeletal plan of a house, but it's up 
+to you to build it, giving you the freedom to adjust your plans as you go.</para>
 
-<para>Another advantage of a custom built Linux system is security. 
+<para>Another advantage of a custom built Linux system is security.
 By compiling the entire system from source code, you are empowered to audit
 everything and apply all the security patches you feel are needed. You don't 
 have to wait for somebody else to compile binary packages that fix a security
-hole. Examine the new patch and build it yourself.  You have no guarantee 
+hole. Examine the new patch and build it yourself. You have no guarantee 
 that the new package was built correctly and actually fixes the problem
 (adequately). You never truly know whether a security hole is fixed or
 not unless you do it yourself.</para>