From 8199f8e631779eaa98561e74a4b47baa7757a591 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: David Bryant <davidbryant@gvtc.com>
Date: Tue, 6 Dec 2022 12:55:34 -0600
Subject: Removed some circomlocutions. Made "option" singular; "des" only
 appears once. Improved idiom ("as shown below"). "command line" is two words;
 "front end" is two words. "Swiss Army" is a trademark; it should be
 caputalized.

---
 chapter08/perl.xml | 28 ++++++++++++++--------------
 1 file changed, 14 insertions(+), 14 deletions(-)

(limited to 'chapter08')

diff --git a/chapter08/perl.xml b/chapter08/perl.xml
index 461eb7980..1e237ddc6 100644
--- a/chapter08/perl.xml
+++ b/chapter08/perl.xml
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@
 
 <screen><userinput remap="pre">patch -Np1 -i ../&perl-fix-patch;</userinput></screen>
 -->
-    <para>This version of Perl now builds the Compress::Raw::Zlib and
+    <para>This version of Perl builds the Compress::Raw::Zlib and
     Compress::Raw::BZip2 modules. By
     default Perl will use an internal copy of the sources for the build.
     Issue the following command so that Perl will use the libraries
@@ -56,8 +56,8 @@
 export BUILD_BZIP2=0</userinput></screen>
 
     <para>To have full control over the way Perl is set up, you can remove the
-    <quote>-des</quote> options from the following command and hand-pick the way
-    this package is built. Alternatively, use the command exactly as below to
+    <quote>-des</quote> option from the following command and hand-pick the way
+    this package is built. Alternatively, use the command exactly as shown below to
     use the defaults that Perl auto-detects:</para>
 
  <screen><userinput remap="configure">sh Configure -des                                         \
@@ -82,7 +82,7 @@ export BUILD_BZIP2=0</userinput></screen>
         <term><parameter>-Dvendorprefix=/usr</parameter></term>
         <listitem>
           <para>This ensures <command>perl</command> knows how to
-          tell packages where they should install their perl modules.</para>
+          tell packages where they should install their Perl modules.</para>
         </listitem>
       </varlistentry>
 
@@ -99,33 +99,33 @@ export BUILD_BZIP2=0</userinput></screen>
         -Dman3dir=/usr/share/man/man3</parameter></term>
         <listitem>
           <para>Since Groff is not installed yet, <command>Configure</command>
-          thinks that we do not want man pages for Perl.  Issuing these
-          parameters overrides this decision.</para>
+          will not create man pages for Perl.  These
+          parameters override this behavior.</para>
         </listitem>
       </varlistentry>
 
       <varlistentry>
         <term><parameter>-Duseshrplib</parameter></term>
         <listitem>
-          <para>Build a shared libperl needed by some perl modules.</para>
+          <para>Build a shared libperl needed by some Perl modules.</para>
         </listitem>
       </varlistentry>
 
       <varlistentry>
         <term><parameter>-Dusethreads</parameter></term>
         <listitem>
-          <para>Build perl with support for threads.</para>
+          <para>Build Perl with support for threads.</para>
         </listitem>
       </varlistentry>
 
       <varlistentry>
         <term><parameter>-Dprivlib,-Darchlib,-Dsitelib,...</parameter></term>
         <listitem>
-          <para>These settings define where Perl is looking for installed
+          <para>These settings define where Perl looks for installed
           modules. The LFS editors chose to put them in a directory structure
           based on the Major.Minor version of Perl (&perl-version-min;) which
           allows upgrading Perl to newer Patch levels (&perl-version;) without
-          the need to reinstall all of the modules again.</para>
+          reinstalling all of the modules.</para>
         </listitem>
       </varlistentry>
 
@@ -185,7 +185,7 @@ unset BUILD_ZLIB BUILD_BZIP2</userinput></screen>
       <varlistentry id="corelist">
         <term><command>corelist</command></term>
         <listitem>
-          <para>A commandline frontend to Module::CoreList</para>
+          <para>A command line front end to Module::CoreList</para>
           <indexterm zone="ch-system-perl corelist">
             <primary sortas="b-corelist">corelist</primary>
           </indexterm>
@@ -250,8 +250,8 @@ unset BUILD_ZLIB BUILD_BZIP2</userinput></screen>
       <varlistentry id="instmodsh">
         <term><command>instmodsh</command></term>
         <listitem>
-          <para>Shell script for examining installed Perl modules,
-          and can create a tarball from an installed module</para>
+          <para>Shell script for examining installed Perl modules;
+          it can create a tarball from an installed module</para>
           <indexterm zone="ch-system-perl instmodsh">
             <primary sortas="b-instmodsh">instmodsh</primary>
           </indexterm>
@@ -284,7 +284,7 @@ unset BUILD_ZLIB BUILD_BZIP2</userinput></screen>
         <listitem>
           <para>Combines some of the best features of C, <command>sed</command>,
           <command>awk</command> and <command>sh</command> into a single
-          swiss-army language</para>
+          Swiss Army language</para>
           <indexterm zone="ch-system-perl perl">
             <primary sortas="b-perl">perl</primary>
           </indexterm>
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