Updates

git-svn-id: http://svn.linuxfromscratch.org/LFS/trunk/BOOK@478 4aa44e1e-78dd-0310-a6d2-fbcd4c07a689

2 files changed, 21 insertions, 19 deletions

diff --git a/chapter02/commands.xml b/chapter02/commands.xml
index f862b5572..5b740893e 100644
--- a/chapter02/commands.xml
+++ b/chapter02/commands.xml
@@ -6,18 +6,18 @@ LFS Commands is a tarball containing files which list the installation
 commands for the packages installed in this book. These files can be
 used to dump to a shell and install the packages, though some files 
 need to be modified (for example, when the kbd package is 
-installed, it is needed to select the keyboard layout file, which can't be
-guessed).
+installed, you needed to select the keyboard layout file, becaue it can't 
+reliably be guessed).
 </para>
 
 <para>
-These files can be used to quickly find out which commands have been
-changed between the different LFS versions as well. A user just downloads the
+These files can also be used to quickly find out which commands have been
+changed between the different LFS versions as well. Download the
 lfs-commands tarball for this book version and the previous book version 
-and runs a diff on the files. That way it is possible to see which packages
-have 
-updated installation instructions, and he can modify his own scripts or 
-reinstall a package if it seems necessary.
+and run a diff on the files. That way it is possible to see which packages
+have updated installation instructions, so any scripts you may have can 
+be modified, or you can reinstall a package if you think that
+necessary.
 </para>
 
 <para>
diff --git a/chapter04/introduction.xml b/chapter04/introduction.xml
index 31fa08d23..661aa68c6 100644
--- a/chapter04/introduction.xml
+++ b/chapter04/introduction.xml
@@ -5,10 +5,10 @@
 Below is a list of all the packages that are needed to download for building
 the basic system. The version numbers printed correspond to versions of
 the software that is known to work and which this book is based on. 
-If the user 
-experiences problems which he can't solve himself, he should download the
+If you 
+experience problems which you can't solve yourself, then please download the
 version that
-is assumed in this book (in case he downloaded a newer version).
+is assumed in this book (in case you downloaded a newer version).
 </para>
 
 <para>
@@ -22,21 +22,23 @@ Version</ulink>
 We have provided a list of official download sites of the packages below
 in <ulink url="appendixc.html">Appendix C - Official download locations
 </ulink>. The LFS FTP archive only contains the versions of packages 
-that are recommended for use in this book. Newer versions than the ones
-listed here might be found after having a look in Appendix C.
+that are recommended for use in this book. You can check the official
+sites in Appendix C to determin whether a newer package is available.
+If you do download a newer package, we would appreciate hearing
+whethere you were able to install the package using this book's
+instructions or not.
 </para>
 
 <para>
 Please note that all files downloaded from the LFS FTP archive are files
-compressed with bzip2 instead of gz. If the user does not know how to
-handle bz2
-files, he should read <ulink url="ch02-install.html">Chapter 2 - How to install
-the software</ulink>.
+compressed with bzip2 instead of gz. If you don't know how to
+handle bz2 files, check out 
+<ulink url="ch02-install.html">Chapter 2 - How to install the 
+software</ulink>.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-The list below is current as of April 2nd, 2001 (give or take a few
-packages).
+The list below is current as of April 2nd, 2001
 </para>
 
 </sect1>