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diff --git a/chapter03/creatingdirs.xml b/chapter03/creatingdirs.xml
index 543320fc4..723bfe71c 100644
--- a/chapter03/creatingdirs.xml
+++ b/chapter03/creatingdirs.xml
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ desired for all directories. I haven't checked the FHS if they suggest
 default modes for certain directories, so I'll just change the modes for
 a few directories that make sense to change. The first change is a mode 
 0750 for the $LFS/root directory. This is to make sure that not just 
-everybody can enter the /root directory (the same you would do with 
+everybody can enter the /root directory (the same a user would do with 
 /home/username directories). The second change is a mode 1777 for the tmp 
 directories. This way every user can write stuff to the /tmp directory if 
 they need to. The sticky (1) bit makes sure users can't delete other 
@@ -57,9 +57,9 @@ such a way that every body (owner, group, world) can write to that directory.
 </literallayout></blockquote>
 
 <para>
-Now that the directories are created, copy the source files you have
-downloaded in chapter 3 to some subdirectory under $LFS/usr/src (you will
-need to create this subdirectory yourself).
+Now that the directories are created, copy the source files that were
+downloaded in chapter 3 to some subdirectory under $LFS/usr/src (this 
+directory needs to be created yet).
 </para>
 
 </sect1>
diff --git a/chapter03/creatingfs.xml b/chapter03/creatingfs.xml
index 67555739a..13c54e4d8 100644
--- a/chapter03/creatingfs.xml
+++ b/chapter03/creatingfs.xml
@@ -3,12 +3,13 @@
 
 <para>
 Once the partition is created, we have to create a new file system on
-that partition. If you want to create an ext2 file system, use the mke2fs 
-command. If you want to create a reiser file system, use the mkreiserfs
-command. If you want to create a different kind of file system, use the
-appropriate command. Enter the new partition as the only option to the
-command and the file system will be created. If your partition is hda2
-and you want ext2 you would run:
+that partition. To create an ext2 file system, the mke2fs command is the
+correct choice. To create a reiser file system, the mkreiserfs command
+should be used. To create a different kind of file system, the
+appropriate command needs to be executed. The new partition used
+as the only option to the
+command and the file system will be created. If the partition is hda2
+and ext2 is to be creaed, the user would run:
 </para>
 
 <blockquote><literallayout>
@@ -18,7 +19,7 @@ and you want ext2 you would run:
 </literallayout></blockquote>
 
 <para>
-If you want reiserfs you would run:
+To use reiserfs the user would run:
 </para>
 
 <blockquote><literallayout>
diff --git a/chapter03/creatingpart.xml b/chapter03/creatingpart.xml
index bf319af93..f1b3c02ec 100644
--- a/chapter03/creatingpart.xml
+++ b/chapter03/creatingpart.xml
@@ -4,18 +4,19 @@
 <para>
 Before we can build our new Linux system, we need to have an empty Linux
 partition on which we can build our new system. I recommend a partition size
-of around 750 MB. This gives you enough space to store all the tarballs and 
+of around 750 MB. This gives enough space to store all the tarballs and 
 to compile all packages without worrying running out of the necessary 
-temporary disk space. If you already have a Linux Native partition available, 
-you can skip this subsection.
+temporary disk space. If a Linux Native partition is already available, 
+this subsection can be skipped.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-Start the cfdisk program (or another fdisk like program you prefer) with the
-appropriate hard disk as the option (like /dev/hda if you want to create a
-new partition on the primary master IDE disk). Create a Linux Native
-partition, write the partition table and exit the cfdisk program. Remember 
-what your new partition's designation is. It could be something
+The cfdisk program (or another fdisk like program the user prefers) is
+started with the
+appropriate hard disk as the option (like /dev/hda if he wants to create a
+new partition on the primary master IDE disk). He creates a Linux Native
+partition, writes the partition table and exits the cfdisk program. 
+The new partition's designation should be remembered. It could be something
 like hda11 (as it is in my case). This newly created partition will be
 referred to as the LFS partition in this book.
 </para>
diff --git a/chapter03/mounting.xml b/chapter03/mounting.xml
index 00b836156..b6a7e6781 100644
--- a/chapter03/mounting.xml
+++ b/chapter03/mounting.xml
@@ -4,11 +4,12 @@
 <para>
 Now that we have created the ext2 file system, it is ready for use. All we have
 to do to be able to access it (as in reading from and writing date to it) is
-mounting it. If you mount it under /mnt/lfs, you can access this partition
-by going to the /mnt/lfs directory and then do whatever you need to do. This
-book will assume that you have mounted the partition on a subdirectory
-under /mnt. It doesn't matter which directory you choose, just make sure
-you remember what you chose.
+mounting it. If it is mounted under /mnt/lfs, this partition can be accessed 
+by going to the /mnt/lfs directory and then doing whatever needed to do. This
+book will assume that the partition was mounted on a subdirectory
+under /mnt. It doesn't matter which directory is chosen, the user just has 
+to make sure
+that he remembers what he chose.
 </para>
 
 <para>
@@ -32,16 +33,15 @@ Now mount the LFS partition by running:
 </literallayout></blockquote>
 
 <para>
-Replace <quote>xxx</quote> by your partition's designation.
+Replace <quote>xxx</quote> by the partition's designation.
 </para>
 
 <para>
-This directory (/mnt/lfs) is the $LFS variable you have read about earlier.
-So if you read somewhere to "cp inittab $LFS/etc" you actually will type
-<quote>cp inittab /mnt/lfs/etc</quote>. Or if you want to use the $LFS
-environment variable, execute <userinput>export LFS=/mnt/lfs</userinput>
-now.
-</para>
+This directory (/mnt/lfs) is the $LFS variable I have written about earlier.
+So if the user somewhere reads to "cp inittab $LFS/etc" he actually will type
+<quote>cp inittab /mnt/lfs/etc</quote>. Or if he wants to use the $LFS
+environment variable, <userinput>export LFS=/mnt/lfs</userinput> has to be 
+executed now.  </para>
 
 </sect1>