Several minor wording changes in chapter 6 (matt).

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7 files changed, 54 insertions, 58 deletions

diff --git a/chapter06/chroot.xml b/chapter06/chroot.xml
index 80a27709f..d02c94e40 100644
--- a/chapter06/chroot.xml
+++ b/chapter06/chroot.xml
@@ -37,12 +37,12 @@ restricted to the LFS file system.  This is because the Bash shell is
 told that <filename class="directory">$LFS</filename> is now the root
 (<filename class="directory">/</filename>) directory.</para>
 
-<para>Notice that <filename class="directory">/tools/bin</filename>
-comes last in the <envar>PATH</envar>. This means that a
-temporary tool will not be used anymore as soon as its final version
-is installed. This occurs when the shell does not <quote>remember</quote> the
-locations of executed binaries&mdash;for this reason, hashing is switched
-off by passing the <parameter>+h</parameter> option to <command>bash</command>.</para>
+<para>Notice that <filename class="directory">/tools/bin</filename> comes last
+in the <envar>PATH</envar>. This means that a temporary tool will no longer be
+used once its final version is installed. This occurs when the shell does not
+<quote>remember</quote> the locations of executed binaries&mdash;for this
+reason, hashing is switched off by passing the <parameter>+h</parameter> option
+to <command>bash</command>.</para>
 
 <para>It is important that all the commands throughout the remainder
 of this chapter and the following chapters are run from within the
diff --git a/chapter06/createfiles.xml b/chapter06/createfiles.xml
index 8126a11a9..164e165c9 100644
--- a/chapter06/createfiles.xml
+++ b/chapter06/createfiles.xml
@@ -7,10 +7,10 @@
 <title>Creating Essential Symlinks</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="createfiles.html"?>
 
-<para>Some programs use hard-wired paths to programs which do not yet
-exist. In order to satisfy these programs, create a number of symbolic
-links which will be replaced by real files throughout the course of
-this chapter after the software has been installed.</para>
+<para>Some programs use hard-wired paths to programs which do not exist yet. In
+order to satisfy these programs, create a number of symbolic links which will be
+replaced by real files throughout the course of this chapter after the software
+has been installed.</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>ln -s /tools/bin/{bash,cat,pwd,stty} /bin
 ln -s /tools/bin/perl /usr/bin
diff --git a/chapter06/creatingdirs.xml b/chapter06/creatingdirs.xml
index 3a574fee6..f8344fef5 100644
--- a/chapter06/creatingdirs.xml
+++ b/chapter06/creatingdirs.xml
@@ -49,16 +49,15 @@ bit mask.</para>
 <sect2>
 <title>FHS Compliance Note</title>
 
-<para>The directory tree is based on the Filesystem Hierarchy Standard
-(FHS) standard (available at <ulink
-url="http://www.pathname.com/fhs/"/>). Besides the tree created above,
-this standard stipulates the existence of <filename
+<para>The directory tree is based on the Filesystem Hierarchy Standard (FHS)
+ (available at <ulink url="http://www.pathname.com/fhs/"/>). In addition
+to the tree created above, this standard stipulates the existence of <filename
 class="directory">/usr/local/games</filename> and <filename
-class="directory">/usr/share/games</filename>.  We do not recommend
-these for a base system, however, feel free to make the system
-FHS-compliant.  The FHS is not precise as to the structure of the
-<filename class="directory">/usr/local/share</filename> subdirectory,
-so we created only the directories that are needed.</para>
+class="directory">/usr/share/games</filename>. The FHS is not precise as to the
+structure of the <filename class="directory">/usr/local/share</filename>
+subdirectory, so we create only the directories that are needed. However, feel
+free to create these directories if you prefer to conform more strictly to the
+FHS standard.</para>
 
 </sect2>
 
diff --git a/chapter06/glibc.xml b/chapter06/glibc.xml
index ab854be82..0420f91bc 100644
--- a/chapter06/glibc.xml
+++ b/chapter06/glibc.xml
@@ -110,8 +110,9 @@ Certain optimization settings are also known to be a factor here.</para></listit
 host system issues. The exact reasons are not yet clear.</para></listitem>
 
 <listitem><para>If you have mounted the LFS partition with the
-<parameter>noatime</parameter> option, the <emphasis>atime</emphasis>
-test will fail.  This is not critical.</para></listitem>
+<parameter>noatime</parameter> option, the <emphasis>atime</emphasis> test will
+fail. As mentioned in <xref linkend="space-mounting"/>, do not use the
+<parameter>noatime</parameter> option while building LFS.</para></listitem>
 
 <listitem><para>When running on older and slower hardware, some tests
 can fail because of test timeouts being exceeded.</para></listitem>
@@ -189,10 +190,10 @@ on the threading API (applicable to NPTL as well):</para>
 <indexterm zone="conf-glibc"><primary sortas="e-/etc/nsswitch.conf">/etc/nsswitch.conf</primary></indexterm>
 <indexterm zone="conf-glibc"><primary sortas="e-/etc/localtime">/etc/localtime</primary></indexterm>
 
-<para>The <filename>/etc/nsswitch.conf</filename> file needs to be
-created because, although Glibc provides defaults when this file is
-missing or corrupt, the Glibc defaults do not work well with
-networking. The time zone also needs to be set up.</para>
+<para>The <filename>/etc/nsswitch.conf</filename> file needs to be created
+because, although Glibc provides defaults when this file is missing or corrupt,
+the Glibc defaults do not work well in a networked environment. The time zone
+also needs to be configured.</para>
 
 <para>Create a new file <filename>/etc/nsswitch.conf</filename> by running the
 following:</para>
@@ -228,8 +229,8 @@ running:</para>
 <screen><userinput>cp --remove-destination /usr/share/zoneinfo/<replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> \
     /etc/localtime</userinput></screen>
 
-<para>Replace <replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> with the name of the time zone that the
-<command>tzselect</command> provided (e.g., Canada/Eastern).</para>
+<para>Replace <replaceable>[xxx]</replaceable> with the name of the time zone
+that <command>tzselect</command> provided (e.g., Canada/Eastern).</para>
 
 <para>The meaning of the cp option:</para>
 
diff --git a/chapter06/kernfs.xml b/chapter06/kernfs.xml
index 2755dea13..397033cdf 100644
--- a/chapter06/kernfs.xml
+++ b/chapter06/kernfs.xml
@@ -7,9 +7,9 @@
 <title>Mounting Virtual Kernel File Systems</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="kernfs.html"?>
 
-<para>Various file systems exported by the kernel do not exist on the
-hard drive, but are used to communicate to and from the kernel
-itself.</para>
+<para>Various file systems exported by the kernel are used to communicate to and
+from the kernel itself. These file systems are virtual in that no disk space is
+used for them. The contents of the file systems resides in memory.</para>
 
 <para>Begin by creating directories onto which the file systems will be mounted:</para>
 
diff --git a/chapter06/pwdgroup.xml b/chapter06/pwdgroup.xml
index 9ae45f02c..cc7452d90 100644
--- a/chapter06/pwdgroup.xml
+++ b/chapter06/pwdgroup.xml
@@ -50,15 +50,14 @@ utmp:x:13:
 usb:x:14:</literal>
 EOF</userinput></screen>
 
-<para>The created groups are not part of any standard&mdash;they are some
-of the groups that the Udev configuration will be using in the next
-section. The Linux Standard Base (LSB, available at <ulink
-url="http://www.linuxbase.org"/>) recommends only that, besides the
-group <quote>root</quote> with a Group ID (GID) of 0, a group
-<quote>bin</quote> with a GID of 1 be present. All other group names
-and GIDs can be chosen freely by the system administrator since
-well-written packages do not depend on GID numbers, but rather use the
-group's name.</para>
+<para>The created groups are not part of any standard&mdash;they are some of the
+groups that the Udev configuration will use in the next section. The Linux
+Standard Base (LSB, available at <ulink url="http://www.linuxbase.org"/>)
+recommends only that, besides the group <quote>root</quote> with a Group ID
+(GID) of 0, a group <quote>bin</quote> with a GID of 1 be present. All other
+group names and GIDs can be chosen freely by the system administrator since
+well-written packages do not depend on GID numbers, but rather use the group's
+name.</para>
 
 <para>To remove the <quote>I have no name!</quote> prompt, start a new
 shell. Since a full Glibc was installed in <xref
diff --git a/chapter06/readjusting.xml b/chapter06/readjusting.xml
index 9d6dd0e7b..cd7fdfb6b 100644
--- a/chapter06/readjusting.xml
+++ b/chapter06/readjusting.xml
@@ -7,25 +7,22 @@
 <title>Re-adjusting the Toolchain</title>
 <?dbhtml filename="readjusting.html"?>
 
-<para>Now that the new and final C libraries have been installed, it
-is time to adjust the toolchain again. The toolchain will be adjusted
-so that it will link any newly compiled program against these new
-libraries. This is the same process used in the
-<quote>Adjusting</quote> phase in the beginning of <xref
-linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/>, even though it looks to be
-reversed. In <xref linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/>, the chain was
-guided from the host's <filename
-class="directory">/{,usr/}lib</filename> directories to the new
-<filename class="directory">/tools/lib</filename> directory. Now, the
-chain will be guided from that same <filename
-class="directory">/tools/lib</filename> directory to the LFS
-<filename class="directory">/{,usr/}lib</filename> directories.</para>
-
-<para>Start by adjusting the linker. The source and build directories
-from the second pass over Binutils were retained for this purpose.
-Install the adjusted linker by running the following command from
-within the <filename class="directory">binutils-build</filename>
-directory:</para>
+<para>Now that the final C libraries have been installed, it is time to adjust
+the toolchain again. The toolchain will be adjusted so that it will link any
+newly compiled program against these new libraries. This is the same process
+used in the <quote>Adjusting</quote> phase in the beginning of <xref
+linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/>, but with the adjustments reversed. In <xref
+linkend="chapter-temporary-tools"/>, the chain was guided from the host's
+<filename class="directory">/{,usr/}lib</filename> directories to the new
+<filename class="directory">/tools/lib</filename> directory. Now, the chain will
+be guided from that same <filename class="directory">/tools/lib</filename>
+directory to the LFS <filename class="directory">/{,usr/}lib</filename>
+directories.</para>
+
+<para>Start by adjusting the linker. The source and build directories from the
+second pass of Binutils were retained for this purpose. Install the adjusted
+linker by running the following command from within the <filename
+class="directory">binutils-build</filename> directory:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>make -C ld INSTALL=/tools/bin/install install</userinput></screen>